Cartoon interpretieren < Korrekturlesen < Englisch < Sprachen < Vorhilfe
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(Frage) beantwortet  | | Datum: | 14:22 So 21.02.2010 | | Autor: | Nadine__ |
| Aufgabe | | Ich muss in Englisch einen Cartoon analysieren. Bin leider nicht wirklich gut in Englisch. Kann vielleicht jemand mal über meinen Text lesen und korriegieren? (ist noch nicht ganz fertig) |
The cartoon published in a news paper deals with a very thinly lion who mirror the British King and the decline of the British Empire.
At first sight the cartoon is desperate, because the lion is very thin and breached and the sun setting down.
The first impression of the cartoon is confused, because normally the lion symbolize power and is not so weak.
In the foreground you can see the lion who goes to the sun. You can see the bones and ribs of the lion an on his flank is got an bandage. The tail is connected. Around his head and his body fly flies.
He wears an crown and his head is down.
In the background you can see the setting sun. The rays of the sun mirror the flag of the junion jack.
The cartoon expresses the situation of the British Empire. The lion represent the King of the British Empire. Normally, he is strong and not ruled the Empire. But the British Empire was the largest in world history in the nineteenth century and the king travel around the world. He had much to do. This weaked him.
“The sun never sets on the British Empire”. This phrase shows that the British Empire was the world’s foremost global power. In the cartoon the sun setting. The sun symbolize thus the British Empire who is setting down.
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(Antwort) fertig  | | Datum: | 15:58 So 21.02.2010 | | Autor: | mmhkt |
Guten Tag,
einige Anmerkungen - ohne den Anspruch auf Vollständigkeit:
> The cartoon published in a newspaper deals with a very
> thinly ("thinly" wäre ein Adverb, hier brauchst Du aber nur ein Adjektiv, also "thin") lion who mirrors the British King and the decline of
> the British Empire.
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> At first sight the cartoon is desperate, because the lion
> is very thin and breached and the sun is setting down.
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> The first impression of the cartoon is confused, because
> normally the lion symbolizes power and is not so weak.
> In the foreground you can see the lion who (m.E. wird hier "which" gebraucht) goes to (vielleicht besser" "towards") the sun.
> You can see the bones and ribs of the lion (m.E. passte es mit Genitiv "lion's" besser) and on his flank
> is got an bandage. (entweder nur "is" oder "he has got") The tail is connected. ("connected" heißt zwar auch "verbunden", in diesem Fall ist es aber passender das Gegenstück zu "bandagiert", also "bandaged" zu nehmen. Around his head
> and his body fly flies. (alternativ: Flies are flying around his head and body. "flying" - die tun das andauernd)
> He wears an ("an" nur bei folgenden Substantiven die mit einem Vokal beginnen) crown and his head is (eventuell noch "hanging") down.
> In the background you can see the setting sun. The rays of
> the sun mirror the flag of the
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> The cartoon expresses the situation of the British Empire.
> The lion represents the King of the British Empire.
> Normally, he is strong and not ruled ("nicht regiert" - was wolltest Du ausdrücken?) the Empire. But the
> British Empire was the largest in world history in the
> nineteenth century and the king travelled around the world. He
> had much to do. This weakened him.
> “The sun never sets on (nicht eher "in"?) the British Empire”. This phrase
> shows that the British Empire was the world’s foremost
> global power. In the cartoon the sun is setting. The sun
> symbolizes thus the British Empire which is setting down. [b](alternativ vielleicht "declining")
Soweit meine Vorschläge.
Achte bei Verben etwas mehr auf "he - she - it: das s muss mit".
Schönen Restsonntag
mmhkt
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(Frage) beantwortet | | Datum: | 16:47 So 21.02.2010 | | Autor: | Nadine__ |
Danke!
Ich hab jetzt auch noch das ändere formuliert.
Könnte dies auch Jemand korrektur lesen?
The cartoon shows clearly the situation of the British Empire. The British Empire was the largest and most powerful empire at that time. But just because the king had so much to do and traveling so much around the world, the country was nearing collapse. The message of the cartoonist's is that even such a strong Empire may be weak.
In my opinion of view the cartoon is exaggerates a lot.The cartoonist has depicted the situation of England exaggerated.
He probably wanted to make people afraid.
The country had been weakened, perhaps for a while. But it exists today and has not yet gone under. This shows once again that the cartoonist has exaggerated.
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> The cartoon shows clearly the situation of the British
> Empire. The British Empire was the largest and most
> powerful empire at that time. But just because the king had
> so much to do and traveling ( wenn du sagen willst, dass der König so viel zu tun hatte und dauernd herumreiste, musst du das Verb (übrigends fehlt ein l) auch in die Vergangenheit setzten: travelled so much around the world, the
> country was nearing collapse ( das verstehe ich nicht ganz. ich würde eher sagen: was nearly collapsing ]. The message of the
> cartoonist's is that even such a strong Empire may be
> weak.
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> In my opinion of view the cartoon is exaggerates ("is" weglassen.) The
> cartoonist has depicted the situation of England
> exaggerated.
> He probably wanted to make people afraid.
> The country had been weakened, perhaps for a while. But it
> exists today and has not yet gone under. This shows once
> again that the cartoonist has exaggerated.
>
Du wiederholst 3mal das Wort "exaggerated"
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(Mitteilung) Reaktion unnötig  | | Datum: | 00:13 Mo 22.02.2010 | | Autor: | mmhkt |
Guten Abend,
ergänzend noch etwas:
> > The cartoon shows clearly the situation of the British
> > Empire. The British Empire was the largest and most
> > powerful empire at that time. But just because the king had
> > so much to do and traveling ( wenn du sagen willst, dass
> der König so viel zu tun hatte und dauernd herumreiste,
> musst du das Verb (übrigends fehlt ein l) auch in die
> Vergangenheit setzten: travelled so much around the world,
> the
> > country was nearing collapse ( das verstehe ich nicht ganz.
> ich würde eher sagen: was nearly collapsing ]. The
> message of the
> > cartoonist's (The cartoonists's message...) is that even such a strong Empire may be
> > weak. ("kann schwach sein" oder vielleicht eher "kann schwach werden" - im letzteren Fall dann "become" statt "be".
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> > In my opinion of view (m.E. reicht hier "in my opinion" - das "of view" scheint mir eher zu "point of view" zu gehören, die beiden zusammen wie hier sind mir nicht geläufig) the cartoon is exaggerates ("is"
> weglassen.) The
> > cartoonist has depicted the situation of England
> > exaggerated. (müsste hier "exaggerated" nicht ein Adverb sein, also "exaggeratedly"? - es beschreibt " depicted" näher)
> > He probably wanted to make people afraid. (alternativ ginge auch [...]to frighten the people.)
> > The country had been weakened, perhaps for a while. But
> it
> > exists today and has not yet gone under. (m.E. eher "gone down")
> > This shows once again that the cartoonist has exaggerated.
> >
>
> Du wiederholst 3mal das Wort "exaggerated"
Schönen Gruß
mmhk
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(Mitteilung) Reaktion unnötig | | Datum: | 15:51 Mo 22.02.2010 | | Autor: | Sparky86 |
Hey, stimmt, das waren auch noch gute Anmerkungen. Ich war leider zu dem zeitpunkt sehr in Eile, da habe ich mich auf das gröbste beschränkt.
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