Erörterung < Korrekturlesen < Englisch < Sprachen < Vorhilfe
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(Frage) beantwortet  | | Datum: | 12:15 So 20.04.2008 | | Autor: | chris18 |
| Aufgabe | | A young person beats down an older person or Teenager break into a store. Such messages reach us near to daily. Whether in the USA, Germany or somewhere else. It is an international issue. The crime increases steadily especially in the areas of Murder, shoplifting and drugs, but also modern crime like computer Crime and credit card fraud is going to be very popular. In my argument I will go the question on the basis if parents should been makes responsible if their children commit a crime. Parents are responsible for her children when they commit a crime, because they are still under aged . The parents have to make the kids clear, that a crime is definitely the wrong way to carry their own point. For instance in poor and socially weak families it is often so, that teenagers are more criminal as in rich and so socially strong families. But on the other hand kids should learn to take responsibility on their own., because they will do it again. Only when they are punished, they realize I made something wrong. |
hallo, ich muss eine Erörterung zum Thema "should parents makes been responsible if their children commit a crime" schreiben mir ist nicht besonders viel eingefallen.
und die Grammatik ist auch nicht so gut (bin schlecht in Englisch). Es wäre nett wenn einer verbesserungs- Vorschläge hätte danke.
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(Antwort) fertig  | | Datum: | 14:08 So 20.04.2008 | | Autor: | Amy1988 |
Hallo!
Also ich werde mal über deinen Aufsatz drübergucken, muss dich aber gleich darauf hinweisen, dass ich nur die Grammatik und nicht den Inhalt verbessern werde!!! 
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> But on the other hand kids should learn to take
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Ich hoffe,d as hilft dir ein bisschen weiter!!!
LG, Amy
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